Law in the Internet Society

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 Whilst there are clearly fundamental breaches of privacy that must be addressed as consumers ought to have the right to determine the use of their information, for example by implementing rules that safeguard a holistic view of privacy comprised of secrecy, anonymity and autonomy rights, the urgent problem seems to be that of both consumers' and lawmakers' technological ignorance. Unless people are able to understand these products and recognize that they are merely part of a deliberately designed organism for behavior collection, the power of these companies and their machines over people will be unwavering, and the effect of rules and regulations misguided and ineffective.
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I think this was a very effective set of revisions along the lines my comments on the last draft suggested. It vindicates both your original choices and the modifications I thought would make improvement, which they do.

At the end of the process, it should be clear, you have explicitly identified an educational deficit which is also the act of learning we are performing together. That should imply the possibility of further learning for other people. It should also imply the possibility of your being part of the relationships that teach them. So if there were to be a further set of revisions in your thinking, whether or not in this essay form, they might center around how you can—to offer a recent cliche—be the change you want to see in the world.

 
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