This draft could be improved if its understanding of the subject began from what the current draft ends on, namely that this had nothing to do with the German government, but was the result of the design for tracking APIs jointly developed by Google and Apple, to provide a worldwide technical solution. Countries like UK that began by designing their own approaches to the application mostly abandoned them to use the Google and Apple APIs, because they were otherwise too far from the crucial issue in the smartphone software: battery consumption. If the handset is to do the work, rather than a centralized surveillance system, which Apple and Google were designing to avoid, only the OS and hardware manufacturers can solve the relevant problem: a handset cannot help if its battery is dead.

In the end, it turned out that the smartphone proximity tracking solution might have been more useful with a different disease in a different set of societies. As you point out in the German example, which is just one example (the next draft would benefit from a little more information about the world, which does not only consist of Germany), the virus escaped control so rapidly that both the amount and the quality of mobile phone proximity data for tracking was inadequate to make a difference. The societies that did best at controlling the virus, like Vietnam, did not depend on smartphone applications at all.

Here too, you submitted a sketchy complete first draft days before the grading deadline, not leaving enough time for the required revision. You are better off with no grade on the transcript at this point than the marker of inadequate performance. Please submit an email message requesting an extension, so I do not have to submit a grade on Jan 8th, and we can work on the required revisions, which will undoubtedly make the draft better. You might find useful Andrew Roth, Stephanie Kirchgaessner, Daniel Boffey, Oliver Holmes and Helen Davidson, Growth in surveillance may be hard to scale back after pandemic, experts say, The Guardian, April 14, 2020