Social Animals VS Digital Feudalists

This is a thoughtful revision, reconceived and much improved. I think that the combination of "digital feudalism" and "surveillance capitalism" is a little confusing. The categories of the dotCommunist Manifesto are strictly those of the originating co-authors: the goal was to update their analysis without fracturing it. That allowed, for example, the Communist Party of India (Marxist) to adopt the text as a policy statement. The maintenance of orthodoxy may appear only a game if we are not ourselves "disciplined" thinkers. But otherwise (as Shoshana Zuboff shows) you need quite a few pages to reestablish what the metaphors actually mean, rather than coincidentally imply.

I think the best next step here would be an exacting sentence edit. Sentences that aren't directly advancing the work of the paragraph should go. References to "this paper" are, if you please, inherently extraneous: don't tell us what the paper does, just do it. The space gained can be used to recharacterize the political economy of the platforms. I commend again to your attention the possibility that they are not separate in fact, but are organs of a single software organism, misdescribed as a "business model."